Prologue

I finally got around to writing the prologue of the novel I'm attempting to write. It took a while to sort out my ideas and rethink a lot of my initial ideas about this world, but I think I finally understand what I need to do.

This story is set in a world where women are surgically/genetically enhanced and sold as "wives" to the upper class (but are pretty much servants/slaves). But rebellion is stirring and a threat that can destroy everyone is lurking in the shadows...

Does that sound interesting? I hope it does. Have a look at the prologue and let me know what you think. I need critical readers to knock some sense into me - too much (unnecessary) information being thrown at you? Did I get carried away with metaphors (I tend to do that...it's either all or nothing haha)? Does my dialogue read like plastic people talking about a cardboard world?

If some genius person can help me come up with a title for this thing, I will be eternally grateful.

And please do let me know if you enjoy it :)

*sidenote: I just discovered the program yWriter, and I love it! It's so useful :)

Prologue:

20 years ago, Stockholm, Sweden

The room was still. Not a whisper of movement as fifteen pairs of eyes stared at the glowing screen in front of them, unblinking. In a few seconds, the world would be altered forever, and these men and women would either dissolve along with the ashes of the earth or be left to mourn and pick up the pieces. It was hard to tell which was worse.

Deep breaths...

During my junior year in high school, I decided that I was going to write a chapter a week and finish a novel within a year. It took an extra month, but I did manage to pull it off. That was my first and only attempt at writing a full novel, so as you can imagine, it was pretty terrible. Plot holes, character inconsistencies, problems with pacing, random facts thrown for no reason...you get the picture. I have since decided that the aforementioned novel is never going to see the light of day.

But...

The idea has been haunting me. I think I had an idea I could really work with and turn into a much better story. Now that I've read more and written more, I have a much better idea of what it takes to write a novel - properly. So I've taken a deep breath and I'm about to start rewriting.

Yes, rewriting. I'm not editing, because I'm not even going to look at the old manuscript. I am changing characters' nationalities and relationships and changing the mechanics behind the world I created, but I'm essentially keeping the story line the same.

I'm still working out the details, especially with respect to worldbuilding, but I am almost ready to start writing again.

Wish me good luck!

(I realize that I'm pretty much writing to no one here, but that's okay. As long as I imagine that someone out there is going to see this, I have sufficient motivation to keep going)

What I'm working on - June 2013

I've decided that at least for the summer, I will try to crank out at least 1,000 words per week. I'm not promising lovely 1,000 word short stories - in fact, this is probably going to be raw randomness that comes into my head. The point is that hopefully if I keep on writing randomness, something worth working on will come up and then I can flesh that out into an actual story.

We will see how this actually pans out.

At the moment, I am working on a story involving people from my floor at UCLA. It started out with me sleep talking, and now I'm trying to explain the gibberish that my subconscious spews when I am asleep. It's quite entertaining actually! What started out as gibberish is turning more into a tongue-in-cheek representation of our dynamic and wonderfully insane floor :) I probably won't post that story on the blog because it will have so many inside jokes that it won't make any sense to anyone else reading it.

I'm also tossing around a couple of ideas around in my head, which I will post about later.